So Im working on a short film
02-02-2012, 01:00 PM
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So Im working on a short film
NO its not a short film because its about my *****
Basically Id like some feedback on these little clips that my friend and I put together. I wont get into the story or anything like that yet. I'd like your honest thoughts and CONSTRUCTIVE criticism based solely on what you see and hear.
Sorry but I cant embed this one as i didnt upload it
Basically Id like some feedback on these little clips that my friend and I put together. I wont get into the story or anything like that yet. I'd like your honest thoughts and CONSTRUCTIVE criticism based solely on what you see and hear.
Sorry but I cant embed this one as i didnt upload it
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02-02-2012, 01:38 PM
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Because it needs to be clear to everyone else that sees the film what it is or at least if it makes them want to see more. Curlys comments are exactly the feedback we need
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02-02-2012, 06:23 PM
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When I watched the first video I thought maybe he smoked too many rocks. Then I got the whole death thing, and thought his shirt is too clean and people rarely die from a crack OD.
Second vid I could see the blood and figured he was shot.
Second vid I could see the blood and figured he was shot.
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02-02-2012, 06:53 PM
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I think it would be cool to have a bit more suspense leading up to the face swipe. Like a steadycam shot of following deaths feet with just audio of the shoe vs ground. And somehow incorporate that with the other cut scenes you took.
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02-02-2012, 07:49 PM
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This is supposed to be a preview, correct?
The only part that was clear was that the guy dressed in black killed the guy laying down. I was vaguely clear that he could have been death, it was not clear who the guy on the ground was.
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