So Im working on a short film
NO its not a short film because its about my penis:giggle:
Basically Id like some feedback on these little clips that my friend and I put together. I wont get into the story or anything like that yet. I'd like your honest thoughts and CONSTRUCTIVE criticism based solely on what you see and hear. Sorry but I cant embed this one as i didnt upload it |
No penis no care:giggle:
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What's the guy on the ground supposed to be doing? Sick? Covered in blood? Just homeless? That part was a little unclear. And then he died.
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Wtf is the point in trying to judge something without knowing the thoughts/ideas behind it? Just curious.
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Not enough penis. Needs more penis.
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Originally Posted by curly
(Post 829842)
What's the guy on the ground supposed to be doing? Sick? Covered in blood? Just homeless? That part was a little unclear. And then he died.
Originally Posted by 18psi
(Post 829844)
Wtf is the point in trying to judge something without knowing the thoughts/ideas behind it? Just curious.
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Reason I'm busting your balls is cause I can't see vid at work :(
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Lol jackass
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The incarnate of death hatin on the kneegrows.
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Jared, you need to get laid.
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Originally Posted by pusha
(Post 829867)
Jared, you need to get laid.
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I'm topping
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Keep it up!
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When I watched the first video I thought maybe he smoked too many rocks. Then I got the whole death thing, and thought his shirt is too clean and people rarely die from a crack OD.
Second vid I could see the blood and figured he was shot. |
I think it would be cool to have a bit more suspense leading up to the face swipe. Like a steadycam shot of following deaths feet with just audio of the shoe vs ground. And somehow incorporate that with the other cut scenes you took.
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Originally Posted by Clos561
(Post 829995)
I think it would be cool to have a bit more suspense leading up to the face swipe. Like a steadycam shot of following deaths feet with just audio of the shoe vs ground.
This is supposed to be a preview, correct? The only part that was clear was that the guy dressed in black killed the guy laying down. I was vaguely clear that he could have been death, it was not clear who the guy on the ground was. |
To long.
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I seriously do appreciate the feedback guys. All of it is being taken into account for the final teaser.
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yo loser, when we gonna go shooting? you can make a video of that.
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Very touching background music, fit well. I felt the bleeding person was a bit vague at first. The blood isn't a focal point and is hidden by the darkness (although the use of light was very good). We don't need gore, just a little more clarity. His hand draws in the eye, so maybe place a bit more there? Or perhaps the t-shirt, since it contrasts so well. The acting was quite good, although the victims right arm would fall lower, not balance on the elbow.
Overall; it looks great! Let us know when you have more, it looks interesting. |
Very much appreciated! We still need to cast our femal lead. So far the one lady that did a screen test with me got too nervous and uncomfortable with me when i let the evil looks kick in lol so she was out. We have lots of work to do yet. I will keep this thread updated with info and progress
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Originally Posted by pusha
(Post 830056)
yo loser, when we gonna go shooting? you can make a video of that.
Im down on the weekends or evenings dude. Im currently fire armless so ill have to bum a gun off you ladies. Ill buy ammo of course. Funny, i was talking to aaron about going with him to collect pythons in the wild and filming that as well |
I'm down.
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