What all grammar nazis aspire to
10-20-2008, 12:31 AM
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The beginning is also wordy and somewhat confusing. He said "In conclusion, on examining the above post by crackmonkey74, after carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..."
From what he says, he examined it after carefully working his way through the haze of spelling errors... But if he worked his way through it already, then he has already examined it.
Better, he would have said "In conclusion, after examining the above post by crackmonkey74, carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..." This more clearly states what he did and is not as ambiguous.
From what he says, he examined it after carefully working his way through the haze of spelling errors... But if he worked his way through it already, then he has already examined it.
Better, he would have said "In conclusion, after examining the above post by crackmonkey74, carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..." This more clearly states what he did and is not as ambiguous.
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10-20-2008, 12:42 AM
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The beginning is also wordy and somewhat confusing. He said "In conclusion, on examining the above post by crackmonkey74, after carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..."
From what he says, he examined it after carefully working his way through the haze of spelling errors... But if he worked his way through it already, then he has already examined it.
Better, he would have said "In conclusion, after examining the above post by crackmonkey74, carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..." This more clearly states what he did and is not as ambiguous.
- Summer Glau
P.S. Don't forget to check out the next season of The Sarah Connor Chronicles this fall on FOX!
From what he says, he examined it after carefully working his way through the haze of spelling errors... But if he worked his way through it already, then he has already examined it.
Better, he would have said "In conclusion, after examining the above post by crackmonkey74, carefully working my way through the haze of spelling errors..." This more clearly states what he did and is not as ambiguous.
- Summer Glau
P.S. Don't forget to check out the next season of The Sarah Connor Chronicles this fall on FOX!
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